Maybe I was a bit harsh....

I commented on this girl's "paper" for her middle school English class.

My comment is as follows

I understand that you’re young, but to be honest what you’ve written is unacceptable, even for a middle school student. I’m only 22, but have writing standards really gotten so bad in schools that what you’ve written here would be considered acceptable?

Make a habit of citing actual factual data (from places like the CDC website, FBI UCR Crime report etc.) rather than citing facts from a random “study” like the Kellerman study, which is completely inaccurate.

Remember, you are writing a RESEARCH paper, thus it might be a good idea to do some actual research prior to writing your paper.

Back when I was in middle school a research paper was a big deal. It involved many library trips and varied and numerous sources. A proper bibliography was expected as were parenthetical references throughout the body of the paper. Proper grammar and spelling were also expected. A piece of trash like this wouldn't even receive a full reading before getting a big fat "F"